EDITING: FEEDBACK FOCUS GROUP DRAFT 1 OF FILM

After showing the first draft of our film to a small target audience these were some of the comments made by the audience.

This exercise proves both helpful and effective for us as we can now ensure the necessary changes are made to ensure a high quality and successful short film.

PRO'S

• The voice over was really good in sync explain plot could tell what she was thinking
• Really like the different effects cut away editing tell reminiscent
• Looked professional
• Liked that Zack featured in the background out of focus
• Delivers the narrative subtlety
• Like the appearance of the film title on electronic sticky notes

CON'S 

• Not so sure on the music/ needs to be silent in certain moments.
• Some kind of melody appropriate.
• Music in the library needs to fit better with the visuals.
• Noise levels of the library. not able to hear the dialogue between the player and the protagonist. in their initial meeting.
• Dubbing in sound seem fake.
• The reading scene seems to quick and ends abruptly.

Solutions 

• We decided to select an instrumental guitar soundtrack we purchased off of artist Luca Stricagnoli, which provides a soft melody to go over the library scenes.
• We decided to use Iphone application of Voice recorder, to make sure the dialogue was clearly picked up and sounds authentic. 
• We also thought about muting the background noise of the library or perhaps turning it down to ensure that the dialogue is the main sound feature of the scene. 
• We decided to extend the scene by making the final smile photo from the protagonist last longer, we also slowed down the whole scene to symbolise time passing.